Feedback

Positive:

Good plot
Wants to know more
Good characters
Good use of tension
The narrative structure is clear
Appealing story
Tension is well built
Very interesting
Good character development
The Story is going somewhere very interesting

Negative:

Show; don't tell
Describe the setting more
Increase the scare factor
Killer needs less dialogue
Can I get the right location when filming?

The majority of the feedback that I got was positive which was unexpected. It seems that the story I've made has entertain both people that reviewed. I will make sure to use this and expand on the story I've written without deviating too far away from what I've already created.

The negative feedback was very helpful. I am going to go back through my script and add as much detail as possible as well as work on "Show; don't tell". However, the recommendation to make the killer have less dialogue doesn't make sense to me. He was being specific to the first kill but the only dialogue the killer has is "Hello Jasmine" and "Goodbye Jasmine". In total, he only as 4 words (2 of which are the same word) so I don't think it's possible nor do I think it's reasonable make the killer have less dialogue.

Secondly, to increase the scary factor I think I am going to add more mystery and not reveal the killer so soon as I did. Also, in terms if whether I can get the right locations when filming, I'm sure that if this was to be turned into a film then I would get the necessary funding to get the location. If not, then there are many tricks tat can be used to look like the building exists.

Magazine Layout Drafts

Magazine Plan

My magazine when focuses exclusively on superhero content. The front cover will have a picture of the latest superhero to talk about as well as a large title of the superhero and the magazine name. On the left be quotes and reviews of the superhero film/comic book and on the right will be annotations of what's in the magazine and the pages where you have find it.

My target audience will be people of all ages and genres who have a great deal of enjoyment from superhero content like the Marvel Cinematic Universe (MCU). I will reach this audience by having the super hero very large and in the centre of the front cover.

Storyboards

A storyboard is a series of a box that are drawn in to show what the film/video will contain. The storyboard will have a drawing of actors, what they need to do, a description pf the shot type and a description of what's going on. 

A storyboard is usually laid out like in this picture. It'll have numbered boxes for the drawing with text underneath. The text will be what kind of shot as well as the short description of what the actors are supposed to be doing and saying. It will also have arrows and other symbols to indicate movement.